ext_186635 ([identity profile] jazzy-fay.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] quirkysmuse 2007-07-03 08:45 pm (UTC)

Nice! I love the line "He puts down the sword for war and picks up the herb to heal." It's poignant, and almost poetic, but simple and not sappy. I also liked the present-tense. It seemed to make the piece more quiet and contemplative somehow.

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