I'm not sure if it was intended to be funny, but imagining Joshua saying "What shall I do if she disrobes in front of me again?" made me laugh out loud.
You've got the characters down nicely (particularly Anna), and the flashbacks fit in well with the rest of the story. (mini!Lisa and younger!Joshua were absolutly adorable)
My only complaint-that-really-isn't-much-of-one: I wanted the story to go on so I'd know what Joshua would do if/when Lisa disrobes in front of him again! =D
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ninetydegrees
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on 2011-02-24 08:54 pm (UTC)I'm not sure if it was intended to be funny, but imagining Joshua saying "What shall I do if she disrobes in front of me again?" made me laugh out loud.
You've got the characters down nicely (particularly Anna), and the flashbacks fit in well with the rest of the story. (mini!Lisa and younger!Joshua were absolutly adorable)
My only complaint-that-really-isn't-much-of-one: I wanted the story to go on so I'd know what Joshua would do if/when Lisa disrobes in front of him again! =D
Great job!